WOW!
that was just amazing! its so visual and beautiful!! i like how u repeated 'running away where no one can see' and then at the end wrote 'standing there where everyone can see' its wonderful!!
i have much admiration 4 u!!
WELL DONE!! if u cud wud u please review my 2 storys: thats not how it happened' and 'the ramblings of a supposed deranged lunatic'!!tanx so much it wud mean the world! love Gretchen45 x

This poem is a bit different. Instead of going for the cliched lover's lament, you seemed to go for a sad and yet resentful aproach, and it worked for you. I like this piece, and hope to read more like it.
p.s. If you could read and review for my new story, I would really appreciate your critiquing.