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| BlueSaviour15 2006-08-31 ch 1,  | abuseQuite honestly, I did not understand the lesson you were trying to teach in this story. Your formatting needs some work (alignment) and some grammar needs cleaning up as well. That wasn't a big problem in the story, but...I'm still confused *_* If you explain it in the next chapter, I'd enjoy the story more. |
| M 2006-01-07 ch 1, anon. | abusehm...rather interesting but hard to understand. Many words were wrong, such as planets for plants, etc. |
| e 2005-01-20 ch 1, anon. | abusei liked it until i reached the end. |
| Andy 2004-07-17 ch 1, anon. | abuseBut the story makes no sense at the end though... |
| Andy 2004-07-16 ch 1, anon. | abuseActually, even though the Buddha taught the Noble EIGHTFOLD Path (right understanding, intention, speech, action, livelihood, effort, mindfulness and concentration), yet, on the path to arahantship (that is, becoming enlighted and attaining nibbana) two more are added, right knowledge and right freedom, which does make the dukkhanirodhagaminipatipada-ariyasacca a tenfold path |
| JLA13 2004-04-18 ch 1, | abuseI don't get the lesson that was supposed to be in this chapter. But I am still looking forward to the next chapter. Maybe I'll get it then. |
| William Winters 2004-03-23 ch 1, | abuseNot bad, not bad at all. I found it a little off that there's a book on how to grow planets...in other words, there's several small grammatical and spelling mistakes that should be cleaned up. Also, instead of including a note at the end, try subtly explaining Loki and Hel during thier dialogue sequence. Just a thought. But overall, I think it's good. |
| Someone 2004-03-13 ch 1, anon. | abuseA) It's the Noble EIGHT Fold Path B) Buddha would never act so violently (punish and such) towards anybody |
| htmraw 2003-12-01 ch 1, | abuseIt was funny but also quite thoughtful. I though Loki was Buddha right up until the point when the little boy didn't hand in his assignment. Also this inspired me not to do my assignment for school. (Although technicly that is against confucious...) Oh well thank you that was a pleasure to read. |