/laughs/ Very, very well done. It took a few seconds for me to get the double meaning of the last line, but when it hit, I couldn't help grinning. You've got this one nailed - let's just hope it doesn't go from being fiction to reality, ne?

And . . . maybe I'm just a hopeless anime fan, but I kept envisioning the homunculus from Fullmetal Alchemist when I read this. Eek. ~ TD

Hot. That was so hot. I love the way you described the sinful demons. You just put this together so very well and ended with such a finished touch. This is polished and unique in its look at a much used tale. Wow. Hot.
~kitish

*applauds* Absolutely //incredible//. I love how you took a well-known story and gave it a fresh new light and a great twist at the end. I honestly wish that I could write poetry as awesome as this. You have a real gift.

wow! cool! ^_^ You have a way with words, my friend.

WOW.That was awesome.