I like this...its good...m...can't think of anything else to say...
Raven-chan

This is great. I don't object to it's length at all, because when implemented correctly shortness (I'm sure that's not an actual word) can be great, such as it is here. If you ever wanted to extend it, you have enough talent to make it something seriously worthwhile.
Anyway, keep it up dude.

o.0 I like! If you ever update it, it'd be cool if the other chapters were events leading to the first one. ^-^

i love this story already
hope you continue this
could you email me when you update it?
thanks