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| Lochi 2007-12-30 ch 6,  | abusehi, I began reading your story yesterday and I like it so far very much. Finally they meet =) Trent sounds cool, he doesn't even sound cocky, wow lol I hope that freaky baseball bat guy won't appear again =) Good job |
| moneymakestheworldgoround 2007-12-06 ch 44, | abuse:) very cute and sweet. i like. :P |
| cc 2007-12-03 ch 31, anon. | abuseah i like Ally but you are making her SOO slutty!! craziness how slutty she is! but good story..minus that detail |
| ployathina 2007-11-30 ch 44, | abuseI absolutely love it. I feel like you had each character's background in you mind as you were writing this. I mean, they each had depth and a back story that worked so well with their character. I hope you write more, because after reading this story, I actually started to become interested in baseball. |
| Camelia Sinensis 2007-11-27 ch 44, | abuseDoes sweet & brilliant even describe this? Not in the slightest. It's amazing! I loved the way you write and I absolutely adore your character! : ] I know it's been a while since you wrote this, but I figured I should review anyway just to let you know what I thought. It's a perfect story. :] Cheers! |
| Jit705 2007-11-13 ch 44, | abuseI really enjoyed this story. I can't wait to read the rest of your writing. Jit |
| DSLuverGurl123 2007-10-26 ch 44, | abuseThis was definitely cuter the second time around :) I love re-reading! lol -Katherine |
| DSLuverGurl123 2007-10-25 ch 1, | abuseHey! I think I read this one before...like in '04 or '05 or something. But I'm just rereading so don't mind me... -Katherine |
| Yankees Fan 2007-09-14 ch 9, anon. | abuseUm, what the heck happened between "Ah ha" and breakfast? Or was the Chinese food their breakfast? I'm totally confused. Did they sleep together? Or not? Leonard's a psycho and is acting a little unrealistically. She needs to stay away from him. |
| Yankees Fan 2007-09-14 ch 8, anon. | abuseI realize you wrote this a long time ago, but I just had it recommended to me because I'm a huge Yankees fan and love baseball, so I thought I'd give it a read. It's funny reading names of players that aren't on the team anymore. I do hate the Red Sox so very very much. Anyway, things are moving quite fast. Ally's written ten books and she's only 23? Really? I don't find that feasible, but...okay. It's fiction. Also, I've been to Yankee Stadium and I believe the players' parking lot is fenced in and has security, so it would've been impossible for anyone to attack Trent there. Also, the fans can't just hang around the players' cars. There's a separate entrance for the players blocked off by metal fences and the parking lot is across from it. I do like how Trent isn't a typical arrogant player. Leonard bugs me, though. Isn't he married? I'd tell him to back off. Ally is way too nice to him. Anyway, you've got a good story, and I'm anxious to see where it goes. |
| cherrypiesizzle 2007-09-08 ch 7, | abuseAw, that was sweet. I think Trent is really great too...the way he's so nervous around Ally and how he blushes and is modest. |
| Gentle. Edge. 2007-09-01 ch 44, | abuseI totally adore this story. It was adorable! xP Great Job! :) :) |
| Gentle. Edge. 2007-09-01 ch 36, | abuseNO! :( |
| Gentle. Edge. 2007-08-31 ch 19, | abuseAw :( |
| Gentle. Edge. 2007-08-31 ch 7, | abuseI love that idea and how brave Ally is. :D |