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| poetic abortion 2005-01-18 ch 1,  | abuseThis was so touching. Brillant poem with such breath taking emotion. ~* Noelle *~ |
| Galadh Niniel 2005-01-15 ch 1, | abuseOh this is so beautiful, I love it. I can relate, though my trust tends to be so weak. I admire the strength of your sin statements like that of the second-last stanza. The imagery you use is absolutely fitting and wonderful. I love the strength of faith and determination to accept everything from the lover (I suppose it is God) in complete abandon, also the way the speaker clings to him and sees her only salvation there. "I'd rather sink than plunge through void" - that is so true, I feel the same. Great job. |
| Zainab 2004-08-24 ch 1, | abuseonce again, nice rhythm. reminded me of a mixture between linkin park and evanescence. |
| Hershey249 2004-04-01 ch 1, | abuseThis really does a great job of capturing the fact that love is a double-edged sword...be your own person, and be alone...or be with someone, and disappear. It's a choice a lot of people have to make...so many women have given up their childhood dreams so their husbands can prosper. That's a more literal meaning, but I think there's something figurative there too...you can lose sight of so many things through love. I love all the metaphors, also. I seem to be on a metaphor kick lately, and this is like eating a really good chocolate bar. Makes me want seconds...:) |
| Getuie 2004-03-27 ch 1, | abuseMan oh man, how I wish I could think of a decent way to tell you how awesome this poem is... *shrugs* Oh well, I'm sure there are many very creative reviewers out there that'll do a better job *adds to favourites list* |
| soulspring 2004-01-15 ch 1, | abusehehe comments for sarah!! great figurative language in this; the beginning kind of reminds me of an evanescence-style work. |
| Lidless Eye 2004-01-04 ch 1, | abuseAwesome... Very powerful and expressive. Great job! ~Lidless Eye |
| Grace Spradlin 2004-01-02 ch 1, | abuseYet another amazing work. You've taken such emotion and woven it into awesome heartfelt poetry for the Lord. |
| Mime 2004-01-02 ch 1, | abuseThis piece is so beautiful...I love the way it flows, and how you can feel the passion behind it. |
| MelodyReiterLee 2003-12-27 ch 1, | abuseWow... full of emotion and imagery... I could feel it... Good job. |
| Werecat99 2003-12-22 ch 1, | abuseThat created another powerful image. Emotions were displayed beautifully, and I totally enjoyed the rhyming. There was this sense of sweet surrender that made this irresistible... Again, thanks for the reviews. PS Any chance of checking out my new poem "It's a cat's life"? |
| Uru'Loki Kaimelar 2003-12-18 ch 1, | abuseGood poem. its been a long time since i've been on. im just wondering but can you tell me what your stats are? (as in words archived, avg... etc...) but this is a cool poem well ttyl *may your pen never blot your paper -Uru'Loki Kaimelar |
| Summerdazed 2003-12-14 ch 1, | abusesplendid job with the words!! and of course the rhyme, i love poems that rhyme. :O) =summerdazed= |
| Anjeni Windsinger 2003-12-09 ch 1, | abuseWow, I love how this poem just flows so easily. Beautiful work. |
| Keep it 100 2003-12-06 ch 1, | abuseThis was such an intense yet beautiful work. The images were great and the lines showed so much passion. Overall an incredible piece. ~Heart of the Sword |