God I LoVe stories like this.!.

It was great but just be careful to make sure that you don't teenagerise your work and make it simple and sweet(to the point). Elaborating provides useful infrmtion to the reader so we can see what you see when you write.

Great work.!.

sappy is good.!.

We always said "not the sharpest tool in the shed" (not "in the tool shed") but I only point it out b/c two tools feels a little redundant.

WOW! nice story!

Loved this chapter. I was laughing at the way she says thing. Really, you are a comical writer. Must continue to read and see how this ends.

And yes, it is the sharpest tool in the tool shed.

wow that was such a good story! love ya!

wow u had me LAUGHING that round!

theres not much i can say, so... bye!

Hey, I really liked the last chapter. :) I usually don't like romance stories and I think that they are really hard to pull off, but you did a spectacular job with the ending!

I re-read this chapter and you ended it WONDERFULLY! I love LoVe LOVE that last sentence! "For now, Ash and I said hello." Beautiful!

ACTION! Nice chapter...

Still lovin' it

Lol I want a dragon...

Plenty eventful to me. I like how you don't make the chapters too long.

Still funny. So I guess Ash has his mind kinda set on Ray?

So...very...funny. I can't wait to see what happens!