I think it was right that Ydana changed into the wondi n the end. Sorry, I have no words for a meaningful review. One criticism i have is that thisstory has no subplots, and you could probably have fleshed it out more and doubled the length. but there is no need- your writing style is very mature

*sniff*i like the endingvery sad and poignant(accolades)

i am sorry to hear that your stories got plagarised. it saddens me to hear that there are horrible people out there who would do such a thing.aargh its scary... how did you find out?

But I want to say GO YOU for fighting that bastard, and I will keep my fingers crossed that you will get your stories back...

I also want to say that, awful as it may be, it is kind of a (sick) compliment to your writing.

I love the sarcasm of the line: And now I am showing pride and humor.I am very worried about myself.

*bawling* Aww, it's over...that was really, really good, though. This was an awesome story. Sorry I didn't comment on each individual chapter like I did in the beginning; I wanted to just read it. Take that as a compliment, that's how I mean it. Truly, this was excellent. I will definitely read more of your writings and I definitely encourage you to go for publication. This is good; the rest of the world needs to read it.

Yeah. Just one more. Really.
Hehe. She has a thing for confusing Great Powers. Go Ydana.
Okay, this is a really wimpy review, but this is really good. It's interesting. Unfortunately, I can't stay to read another chapter, but I will read more soon.

Geez, four chapters in one day? That's a new record for me. These are remarkable easy to read, however; some other well-written stories are a little bit harder to wade through. This Hunt thing is interesting. Eww, cannibalism! Icky! I'm thinking I like Ydana now. Eheh. Destiny changed its mind...yeah. Musing again. Ignorez-moi...What's with Ydana and the blood thing? OOh, strange handsome man on the plains who can read thoughts. Interesting. Maybe just one more chapter...

Eh, I admit I haven't read (any) of your other stories, but after I finish this one I hope to rectify that particular fact. This is interesting; if your other work is half as good, I think I'll just have to read it as well. Interesting quote, btw.
There really isn't anything to correct here; I feel almost useless =) Well, at least you have one happy fawning reader. Maybe not _fawning_, but still. Eh, what's the Judge? I'm guessing I will find out (or just stay the ignorant first-time reader that I am for a while, ne?). Neato, more prophecies. Hehe, what kind of society does Ydana live in? OOh, how old is Tyror? I sense possible romantic conflict, but then again I can sense possible romantic conflict in Calvin and Hobbes, so maybe I'm just being hopeful. I'm one of those weird readers who likes trying to set other authors' characters up (or trying to, anyway). Don't ask, I don't know. Ah, I see. Confirmation of possible romantic conflict. Hehe, go Ydana. Stupid Destiny. And what exactly _is_ the Hunt? Some scary elf thing? All in all, very good.

I'm baack...yeah. I love doing really in-depth reviews and either popping bubbles or blowing them back up (sometimes I even do both in one review! Yay!), so be prepared. Aha, we have a different year reckoning...what could this mean? That History of the Beginning snippet is interesting; it sounds like it's being written by someone who regards humans in almost the same way we regard lizards, or annoying but bilogically interesting insects. OOh, rock-throwing. Just how does one injure a statue, pray tell? Exactly how large are these rocks? I'm thinking maybe easily throwable by a child. And thank you for having an excellent grasp of the finer points of English grammar (which remarkable few people seem to have these days); it makes reading much easier. Aha. It's a wooden statue. That explains it. OOh, nowhere to be Queen of? In case you haven't noticed, I muse a lot. Or talk to myself a lot, but muse sounds more interesting and writer-like. Aha, what do we have here? Conflicting religions? She likes to kill things, eh? What...things? I'm kind of torn between liking her and not liking her. Ydana, I mean. OOh, strange child left on the plains by a strange man...interesting, interesting. I believe I will just have to read the next chapter, as well...

Whee! Another really long story to review! I know you said you wouldn't be updating these (or maybe that was just the other ones?), but I'm going to review anyway because, who knows?, the feedback may help you outside of FictionPress. I'm sorry about the plagiarism thing; I've never encountered that particular problem myself (at least not personally), but I'm sure I will somewhere in the future. Well, good luck writing, hope you don't leave us entirely. Here's your review:
OOh, interesting beginning. Nice hook, all that stuff. Poses some interesting questions.
Okay, this is good. Not just good, this is _good._ With underline dashy things. Go for publication, even from just this snippet, this is good stuff! There are too many writers on FictionPress who don't seem to go for actual publication (i.e. on paper, with a spine and such), but there are stories on here that are better than a lot of published rubbish I've read. Yours is one of them; more people need to read this. I'd try perhaps Tor or Baen if you're so inclined, and I hope you are. I'll keep reading your stuff either way, however. And thank the Spotlight thing on the Fantasy list for helping me find you. Keep writing!

I ~like~ this ending. I find myself enjoying particularly angsty endings as long as I don't know from the beginning that they will be angsty. :)

Are you a Robin Hobb fan?

I'm like... touched.
This story was shorter than you usually write, but I can't imagine it being any longer or any shorter. Great job!

it ended...aw
it is a great story!! good ending.

Happy endings rock.

I was really surprised when you said that you will end it tomorrow anyway. I would liked some more chapters but is a great ending anyway. Happy new year!