this poem, it's soo sad and all the rythmes u put into it amazing,love ta end.

Its good, I like it. The rhyming is cool. I just hope things aren't all that bad.
~Keep your chin up and keep writing

Hey good poem/song (it could work as both) the rhyme works well and flows throughout. It really gave you a sence of giving up. Only thing i would say is the first line meant to be 'maybe if you whisper softly' because it doesnt make sence at the moment?
Do what you do and do it always...