pretty good (well better than most of mine at the very least -_-)

one suggestion I have for you would be to try to break it up into stanzas (don't know if that's spelled right...) (ie groupings of lines kind of like paragraphs, but different too becasue it's poetry). Though you might have done this already and the formatting got messed up during submission (this usually happens to me...). Not that you need to, after all if anything you write should be formatted, etc. to your choosing, it's poetry, I just think it makes most poems read more easily...

Also the line break on "I understand this,/But I'd like to share" seems like it shouldn't be there to me, and it seems to read better as one line, but then again It's your poem, and I could just be reading it with a different rythem or whatever, or for that matter just think differnt things read better... this is really just a minor quibble though...

anyway, 'tis good

Hey! I really like this poem. It is cute.
So, to the point. You read the first chapter or so of my story Never Cry Wolf and you offered to help me out on editing and such. Well, I would love to take you up on that offer, as a matter of fact.
If you read my Bio, you can figure out more about what I am doing with this. Basically, this story is currently being written by four different people on my website and unfortunatly, it doesn't have automatic spell check and such. So what I did was I took it into microsoft word and I did all the auto check and unfortunatly I was forced to go on to the next story, because there is so much and there is only one me.
If you are still interested in helping me out in making this into a beter story format I would GREATLY appreciate it becuase I need more people who can help out on such a large project. I really apreciate your reveiw. Thank you.
Jill Hackett (The Pretenders)

That could be a song! *dances* Yes, 'tis very good. I'm still reading your other works! Keep up the awesome work!

This is a good poem :)

ahh, ramblings are something I hold close to my heart...hehehe...keep writing!