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| E.Maginitive 2008-10-07 ch 16, | Aw, dammit. I should've known the ending planned out in my mind was too good to be true. I wish she could've remembered...leaving it off like this gives me a feeling of...I don't know, incompleteness...? Well, yeah. *sighs* Oh well, obviously it isn't going to change so I'll just mourn about it and change the ending in my dreams. Aren't you flattered to know your story appears in my dreams...? Or at least it will soon...? LoL. Well, hope to see a new story soon! |
| Bam-There You Go 2008-08-16 ch 16, | wow...this was a really, really good story. i read it all in one day, basically non stop since after taekwondo practice this morning. i liked how you made kyushin become human at the end contrary to what you were going to do at first. i also liked how they can be together and even though its not perfect and miori doesnt know its kyushin, they still love each other and life can be better now that kyushin in eiji's body is by her side ( does that make sence?) anyway, i loved it and i added it to my c2, 500 PLUS: Extrodinary Fics with Extrodinary Reviews! |
| gemini's sorrow 2008-05-14 ch 3, | “I don’t doubt that, I see you as the type of guy who would rather have an innocent girl he can bend to his standards,” her dark blue eyes penetrated into him, “Although you probably have, being the pervert you really are.” “I accidentally dropped in on your bath once and I’m a pervert?!” He shouted. “Twice!” “When?!” “This morning!” She yelled, stomping her foot. Kyushin paused, then smiling strangely, he said, “Oh yeah!” She brought her face up to his closely and glared, “'Oh yeah!' you say?! There! I proved my point, you are indeed a pervert!” “I’m a healthy young boy!” he defended. “You’re not even human!” “There you go, being racist.” “You’re not even supposed to exist!” She glared even harder, causing Kyushin to glare back, which resulted in a large glaring contest. lol rhat was too funny |
| Anonymous 2008-05-07 ch 16, | the last two chapters made me cry |
| xbluxmoonx 2008-05-05 ch 16, | aw. that was so cute. i loved the ending too. i'm so happy that they ended up together. only thing is, if it's dark in the room and there's no light source whatsoever i don't believe he'd see her eyes change colors. unless he had super human strengths but er, yeah. and as for konno going into a dark alleyway x-x not exactly a very smart girl. even a ten yr old should know doing that is suicide. it seemed like an easy way for them to just get caught and for her to find saisuke. maybe if the men had seen them and began to follow them around town- maybe if konno THEN proposed the idea of asking for help. though that'd be kinda stupid, too. other than that, lovely story. ^_^ p.s haha five chaps for the little mermaid story. passed that a while ago, neh? thought, i love how a short story can get just spin into a completely new world on its own. =] |
| xbluxmoonx 2008-05-04 ch 8, | holy crapola! awesome ending. just thought i'd review heh. lol. i love this story so far and all. just one thing that bothered me a bit was the whole eye color changing with miori's mood. it sounded so erm well cliche-ish. sorry >< i don't want to be mean or anything, but other than that i really luvs this story and i'm gonna keep reading til the end. heh ^_^ |
| Gimstan 2008-05-03 ch 16, | Aww that was so sweet. I loved the ending, i think it makes it a better ending that she can't remember but its still happy. :) |
| edward-and-bella-forever 2008-04-29 ch 16, | oh my god.. you are amazing... this is one of the best stories ever.. I was so sad when kyushin left but this ending is amazing... I can't wait to read more of your work! |
| wish-my-name-was-akane 2008-04-10 ch 16, | WOW, that's all I can really say about this story. It was... WOW. (claps) If it were a book, I'd buy it in a second. Wow... (shakes head in amazement) |
| wish-my-name-was-akane 2008-04-09 ch 1, | Loved the first chapter! Very very creative idea and I can't wait to read the next chapter. |
| theslykit 2008-04-08 ch 16, | aw...the story was so great but the ending is a little disappointing...thought there ould be more interaction between kyuushin and miori after he took over eiji's body..T_T although the last sentence certainly is very chilling..lol. still... |
| WYMamataro 2008-03-31 ch 16, | Wow, as I read it I could imagine it like I was reading a manga script since Miori thought so much! That is awesome! You should make this into a manga one day...It reminded me of Absolute Boyfriend by Yuu Watase but with a better ending...although I kinda wished Kyushin could have stayed in his old body...:( And that Miori could have remembered...gah, he could have made her remember or something...but then again, life is not that way. Great job with this story, it has become one of my favorites...by the way, what ever happened to Souta and Haruna? I wanted revenge so bad for the way that Souta treated her. I'm glad that Konno is a good person and a story would be so great with the storyline of a gang member looking for a wife! I never thought that something like that would happen...great job! |
| kuramax 2008-03-27 ch 16, | Kaika N; That was a half-assed ending! D: Even though I adored reading every word out of every chapter - I couldn't help but feel so sad that this story's over. A friend recommended me this story and was oozing information like: "Oh my GOD! It's so good, (insert information she was goin to tell me about the story) read it Adette!" And even though I had been being lazy and not getting to reading your story - I stumbled on it again through someone's favorites and I have to say that just did it - and I read every word, sentence, paragraph and passage. Oh - it's electrifying, the story's so amazing that I'm utterly disappointed that it's over with a snap of a finger (insert hours, minutes and seconds during that sitting) I was just so overcome with emotion when I read through it - but I just have tons of questions that I would like to ask. What was Miori's mother's reaction once she found out that her daughter was pregnant? Did she leave the subject of Kyushin alone when Miori said she didn't know who he was? There are a few nooks and crannies that need to be filled in, but I guess that's the beauty of it? (I don't know, I just would really like to know what happened behind closed doors) And the ending of the story (as I stated before) is half-assed! :O Not really, it was just a little too sad for me - I mean, Kyushin is still himself but he's in some other's body and it doesn't seem as if Miori still remembers him (well, maybe after the kiss..) But damn - you've just told a great story and it was the greatest pleasure of reading it. I really got attached reading your story and your characters. I hope that you can find a good graphic novel artist to create a manga version - I'm sure I'd be among the first many or latter few that will read and comment on it. c: Thank you for the most captivating show of writing. You've gained a new fan and reader today. groveling at your hands, ESTK |
| PeterMoore 2008-03-26 ch 16, | i like this story. but i so wish it could have ended differently. i mean the way you wrote it makes it seem that was the only way they could be together, but i so would have loved if she could have ended up with him as himself and not in somebody else's body. he'll never be able to tell her everything, and she'll always think that she had someone else before him. i see why you ended it the way you did, but i just wish it would have been different. |
| PeterMoore 2008-03-25 ch 1, | i like this story. this one of these stories i would just love to see drawn out. |