'Tis Alicia again.

I agree with your other reviewers; but one word of advice, never use the sentence, "Then everything went black." Find a more eloquent (and less overused) way to represent unconsciousness and/or death. I had some characters who blacked out before, and I had to find a creative way to end that kind of section.

That was really good! There are some changes that can be made before you enter it to a contest though - i'm not quite sure what, but it feels like there are mistakes. lol!!
*sigh* I wish angels did that for my dog! He did four or five years ago and i miss him so much!
:)Sky(:
Please read and review my work too? #o.0# *puppydog eyes*

Before you enter this anywhere, you need to edit the punctuation. The last two paragraphs were confusing, because her friends were supposed to be great friends, but you said something about using her for popularity. The end was a little too happy, if you're going to enter it, maybe make jsut a little more conflict. Those are only some suggestions, though.