I'm so glad that this doesn't actually apply to you, as I would hate to see what you'd come up with if it did!
Great piece, like it very much!
Spawny

i can almost feel the words flow, a really good expression.

Wow. Very moving. I'm sad to say that I did not get to see the 'original' story of this, but I'm sure it was just as good as this!

Hiya! Hey this is as good as the original version, though different and quite as good. I likeit a lot, like all your stuff...the first one was...it was less ..sry..it was...the meaning was less obvious than on this one..this is like..direct..what you mean and who it refers to is obvious. Great job! Lvoe, MIa

I will admit that I had to ead the original twice because I confused myself with you words. This version is wonderfully packed with imagery and I did not have to read it twice. Actaully Idid but that was due to how much I enjoed reading it the first time.

This poem is instantly moving, expertly rendered. It is such a sad piece beautifully describing complex emotions of such a situation so well.
Very Well Done,
Keep Writing!
F.C