That last line definitely made it worthwhile. Nothing like anything I've ever seen before.

Ai, I read Root and Anjeni's tyburn too, and I am also amazed by them, as I am by yours.

I really do like this form. Very nice.
~Heart of the Sword

this is really cool! i've never seen this format before, it's neat, it fascinates me. :P the last little bit "i can't hold on to you" was awesome, i wasn't expecting it at all, gave the piece a lot more depth to add to the great sounds and images. excellent poem!

I can't put my finger on why I like this so much...it's simple, yet effective. It seems to me to capture some sort of desperation or frenzy because of the repetition. Anyway. I like. I think I might do one now, because I thought that was so interesting. Thanks to you and Children of the Root

That is really cool! I've never written one of these before, so I might someday...I love this one. It is so eerie, so desperate, so frightening...it is awesome imagery that just put me in that moment. great job here.
write on.

I've never read a Tyburn before, so maybe I'm just virgin to this kind of writing, but I didn't like the repitition that much. It sort of got on my nerves after a while. Maybe I'm not being open-minded enough. Sorry.

A very interesting style... I love it. Excellent job, keep it up!
~Lidless Eye

CotR's was brilliant, and this was no less than. Very creepy, a love it.

I like it! Awesome work. I love the second to last line. Its so cool.