 Leiawen (ff.net) 2003-12-09 . chapter 1 What a neat story! It feels like a fable, or a legend--an amazing effect. Definitely good for Christmastime. Something a mom would probably love, too ;-) If you wanted to change anything, I would avoid repeating "brown muslin" in the 5th and 4th-to-last paragraphs and describe her dress another way one of the times. This is really, really good. Thanks!
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