Solid. Great talent is shown here once more. That's all I need to say.

That was deep. I loved the form at the very end, and just the all around poem. Good job.

Wow. What an incredible ending.
~Heart of the Sword

For some sick reason, I find the sinking of a ship amazingly funny. This is probably because of my time spent with the crazy sailors at CBYC.
I like the ending... but, for the poem, I feel like that, THEN I sail.
In related but completely useless news, I wish I were sailing.
Keep writing.

wow - now this, this is a definite master piece, you definitely have to try and get this baby published, its amazing...earned a definite place on my favs list thats for sure *a very select group*.
first and fore most, that first line left me staggering...it was so great, so contrasting...just perfect...
"lovely boredom" - there was something so utterly eerie and priceless about those 2 words put together which just made me read more, it cpatured my attention, mesmerised me for the rest of the piece...
"Letting the nightmares flourish to reality" that was just such a wonderful way to descripbe it 'flourish' again, such a contrast, but so amazing in its effect.
the last section was amazing, you used the most perfect phrases...but you somehow managed to keep a structure, a shape, whuch made its apprearance so attractive and the poem that much more effective.
i also loved the way you dis connected teh end line "to my light" it was just POW right there in the heart...so great. i loved! kudos!

wOw. As usual, absolutely amazing. I Love the lines,
"Such a lovely boredom you left behind
Pins and needles are filled with tedium."
Everything about this is just incredible. I love it! It's going on my favorites. And awesome ending, it really completes it. Keep up your Great work!!