...the words picked carefully out of the hollow softness of a mouth.
...who's...

The line breaks in this poem are great, because they make it flow well and sort of lead you through to the end...and the imagery is great too, this kind of lonely feeling, especially since the line breaks shorten up the lines. It's got a lot of emotion without being cluttered. I like the way the last line links to the first line as well. ^_^

Oh, my goodness...wow. I sometimes like to quote my favorite lines of a poem, but it's too hard with this one! The imagery is simply stunning...
~winged one~

I like the stucture, feels like a journey. I love the images and the voice.
I was a bit bothered by some of the line breaks, tho.
But, I like this knd of poem. iquite natually do this sometimes. Check out my "journey: poem "Like A buoy", but also check out my favorite one of mine of this style - "Bolt From the Blue". I find if I like writing a style, I also like reading it. Feel free to reference any of your works that mine remind you of if you do find time to review my works.
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very good poem. I love it. I love the meaning behind the words
You laughed, full of life
and told me to wait,
my time would come.
I love that part. I can imagine it. you did a good job creating a scene, without overloading the poem with unecessary information.
and those luminous eyes of
yours
haunt
my
dreams.
(sigh) the way that you wrote this part was very powerful. It added that extra "ummph" of emotion.
~Jessika~