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| halo-effect 2004-12-15 ch 1,   | It disappoints me that no one has commented on this yet. But- neverfear, I'm here to ressolve that. Well, first, great job! Usually, the little echos in the poems are a hindrance, but your parenthesized words mostly work well. Your poem is so sincere, it's touching. Not to mention, I can relate to your poem. It's so highly personal with your poem's usage of I's and you's. I like it, 'cuz it fits. Overall, I'm impressed. Keep writing =). |