Very well written, I think it conveys the feeling very well. I think this actually may be one of the better... erm... unpositive poems I've seen, and those are the type I like to read. If you don't get it, I do.

hmm. cool. I've not really encountered anything quite like that before, and it was odd. In a good way. I like! *nods* very much so! i really liked the title! with a title like that i HAD to check it out! and I was bored, and was reading your profile dooby, AND YOU LIKE GARTH NIX?! i have NEVER found anyone else who likes Garth Nix! other than the few people I convinced to read some of his work, but they don't count. and anyways, your poem was really great love it!

you seem to have a flair for the written arts, as displayed in this poem. Oh and if you had'nt figured out who i am yet, this is froggie.

You don't have to get the poem. To one who has been there before, I nod towards this poem. True, you may not know what you're thinking when you're writing these, but your soul (or equivalent of) just happens to. Another excellent one Shade. This one really touched me, and I applaud you for that.
-James C. Woodall, Maelstrom Chaotis
**NOTE** The Maelstrom Saga has returned! I have re-posted it, and am probably going to post chapter 2 today. Sorry for the long delay, but there were complications. Regardless, may light shine upon thee. ++Prologue, Ch.1 are up!++

This is a really sad poem in my opinion, but it's really good.

Hi,
Wow, this is really good. I loved the phrasing it's really meaningful.
Answer: Yeah I took some things down because I hated them. But I've got a load of stuff to put up.
Thanx for the reviews!

it's the pink bunnies i swear it is. no, really, they arent going to eat your soul, it's ok.

Funny, I understood this ^_^ Ah the pangs of loneliness. I think you depicted 'acid loneliness' quite well. Accurate and yet still poetic. Nice one.
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To writing!
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Jess 0:o)

It's nice. i still understand it but there are some things that i also don't get but basically, it's good.

Actually, I think it's a rather nice poem. It ain't weird at all. Loneliness is like acid. It eats you up, little by little... (or is that bacteria?)

Delightfully dark, and i didnt understand it neither. Did cheer me up somehow. Who exactly do you have for span? You better not be insultin my Howard! As for advice, you might try a repitition style for the short sentences. (starting with same words or style)Keep on writing more of this and the editor gnomes will be happy.

Ugh . . . I am half unconcious at the moment and half of that didn't really click until I read it five times . . . then again, I'm half asleep. -_- Anyway, this is interstingly odd and my favorite line is: "And still this acid loneliness etches itself." The end I'm now sleeping. *zonks out* G . . .
-Mizu