I like the mood and the feel of this one... A couple little things ya might want to look into - "bad" is the adjecive form ("it hurt me bad") but you want the adverb form "badly". Of course that would make it not rhyme... you decide on that one. Also ya misspelt "ment". It should be "meant". No biggie... just my psycho conventionist eye. I really like this though, the rhythm was good and you captured the sense release and given in to the flow of life, if that makes any sense...