lots happening in the first bit. those guys did some sick **. i dont know, you could do some work on it, and give us a little dictionary or something so we can kinda figure out what the cloths and weapons look like. and the peoples talk like modern people, not like romans. i dont know if you were going for historicaly correct, but you didn't hit it. and describe the guy, too. dont ust describe the girl so you can have some sick little fantasys or something. or at least give the girls something to drool over... lol. jp.