Beautifully written Darren, real talent in this one.

GREAT POEM! The only line I wonder about is 'killing slowly to death' it sounds a little...dunno, but hey, don't listen to me. Its your poem, so its your opinion that counts, not mine! ;)

Wow! Awsome! The last stanza is awsome and last line is just beautiful! Nice work here, very nice. The format was nice too! Keep writing!
If u can, plz r and r some of my work too, it will mean a lot to me!
Thanks!