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| Tess 2008-08-30 ch 20,  | Wonderfully written!! though i usually hate love triangles. I like to know who I am cheering for. First I liked all of them. then I didnt like clara then david then Eaton and Rebecca now I feel terribly for the Phinias' though they are both much too niave I am angry at Clara for playing with Davids heart and annoyed taht she paused to 'love' Eaton b4 she realised her feelings for will I am angry at Will for stringing Rebecca along, and annoyed that he- ugh idk i just am! Garrett Ellertson is my favorite character! |
| LeticiaTokioHotel 2008-06-22 ch 20,  | Whoa. Definitely different from every other story I've read. It's a very twisted story and I usually don't read them but I guess I like this one. I can't think how the sequel will plan out. Great story. :) Do you have the sequel yet? I don't think I see it on your profile??..Hmm |
| browneyedbelle93 2008-04-11 ch 20, | Good ideas... keep up the good work make sure to proofread!! |
| fictionrox 2007-05-02 ch 20, | honestly...this story was completely messed up...no offense...but u keep changing the main character...u've got to focus less on rebecca and more on clara if thatz what u intended...the entire story is in confusion...plus...you make it difficult for the reader to...idk...understand whatz happening...i really think this would have been a great story but u've got the totally fix it |
| dawn's unforgiving darkness 2006-12-10 ch 1, | ah evil dukes |
| Taime 2006-12-04 ch 20, | I changed my mind...I hate Clara, William, AND David, Rebecca...Although I still loathe Clara and William MUCH more. Rebecca...is too naive...put it in a good way, she's innocent, but childish nonetheless. I can't believe she accepted the fact Will chose her to go with him and never questioned if he truly loved her or not...William is the ** that shamelessly used Rebecca to make Clara jealous...and Clara being the shameless ** used David to make William jealous...People like them should be hanged...I remember writing a similar review about how I hated Will and Clara...but after time...I got over it...and David, I kinda pity him for being so blind...I pity both Rebecca and David, such naive people that can't see that they are being shamelessly used...I guess in a way I have a soft spot for innocent people however clueless and naive they are... Good story, hate the character (William, Clara, Rebecca, David) |
| Angela St. Mathew 2006-08-30 ch 10, | Hmm...I'm not sure I buy it. He seems like a devious little snake who's just messing around with the poor girl. Ugh, that would make me so mad! |
| Angela St. Mathew 2006-08-30 ch 7, | Have you considered having this published?Just curious. I would certainly buy it. |
| tammy 2006-05-10 ch 20, | da story was quite gud yet i dont fink dat ur endings very gud coz i fought dat u no if hez wit be rebecca den it would have been gud u made her out 2 b so dum but dat made it sad n u neva really paid attention to her brova n i fink claraz stupid fair enough u lyk her but i fink she dont deserve da guy coz itz her own fault but rebecca deserve will i donno y but dey suit fink bout it n if u want get in touch yh |
| elukazina 2006-04-02 ch 20, | Its kinda confusing for the last part about William does he love Clara?? or Rebecca anyways update |
| Nobility 2006-03-13 ch 2, | OK, so I looked at your chart of nobility. Pretty much everything is right, except for one small thing: a marquess is the FEMININE form of marquis. This isn't the first time I've seen people make this mistake, so DEFINITELY don't feel bad. It can be confusing when you call a male a feminine title, though (I for one didn't think you were talking about the son for quite some time), so maybe you should change this. |
| talktomexxdancewithme 2006-01-17 ch 20, | ahh! i just finished your story, even though its been finished writing forever, lol. but i hated clara, and i almost cried about will falling for her and all that business.im devastated. |
| xxhiddenkittenxx 2005-12-21 ch 20, | =/ .. even though this is the ending .. it feels like there's more to it .. like there's going to be a sequal or well.. this is just the beginning. =/ .. how C0NFUSING~~! . ending = beginning . but then .. ah 4get it .. when i began reading it though.. i couldn't stop .. so that's something .. |
| Nyla 2005-10-10 ch 11, | My eyes are hurting from straining to read your story for so long. but i can't help itit's too good to stop xD |
| de Leon 2005-10-08 ch 20, | I just wanted you to know that I really liked your story, but...I don't know...I was left feeling really dissapointed about the whole Clara and Will thing. I really really didn't like them together, and it kind of...oh. this is sounding too much like a flame...I should stop now. |