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Mime 2004-01-02 . chapter 1
I like the way you combined the two different styles of haiku...very unique indeed.
Children of the Root 2003-12-19 . chapter 1
awesome work. I like how its split.
Summerdazed 2003-12-18 . chapter 1
beautiful~~
and such a unique style too!
=summerdazed=
glitterjewele 2003-12-18 . chapter 1
again, very intriguing format, i love that about this piece right off the bat. it's especially cool how you can read the italicized and unitalicized lines together or separately as their own individual poems. certainly a very cool effect, only you could come up with something like this. *applause* wow, it's kind of hard to pick but if you were reading them as separate poems, the mysteriousness of the italicized one is enchanting. "die" was an excellent last line, and for some reason "keep the goddess down" is stuck in my head - great line there, as well. transcendant work, chica. :)
magie poet 2003-12-16 . chapter 1
dark much? just in time for new year's...
Fhulhi the Crazy 2003-12-15 . chapter 1
Hm. Interesting. I like it! It sorta reminds me of my own feelings on things. Lovely haiku, LYV.
Aisling Grey 2003-12-13 . chapter 1
Absolutely beautiful haiku! I love the way it flows. And the imagery is wonderful. The two lines: Sands of time shifting, and the age of pisces ending reminds me of a chinese quote. To me, this haiku seems to be talking about smothering {or burying} your true heritage. Denying what your culture {or other cultures} can offer you. But that's just my interpretation. I love your work.
Keep it 100 2003-12-13 . chapter 1
This made for an interesting read. I liked it.
~Heart of the Sword
frugale 2003-12-13 . chapter 1
That was unusual. Prophetic and moralistic; in an enjoyable way of course.
The Black Rider 2003-12-13 . chapter 1
Fascinating haiku. Your use of cut poetry was really cool as well. Very deep.
Lady B.V Rose 2003-12-13 . chapter 1
cool, i love how it was all disoriented and crap, you know what i mean...sorry about the quick type, i'm a bit busy...
- bvr xx
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