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| Angelfish 2005-09-01 ch 1,   | Nice story! |
| Merit Somnia 2004-04-01 ch 1, | An emotional piece. But realistic. the younger generations are caught up in life but they are not living and some never shall. The woman is trying to help her daughter have a happy life and fufilment. I liked your title and you you used it in the acts. Could very well be compared to life. |
| Just Wolf 2004-03-21 ch 1, | that was breath-taking. i loved how the old woman struggled, trying to make her understand. i could really feel her pain. this was astonishing - i don't really know what to say. |
| doesnotexist 2004-03-19 ch 1, | I think you meant "Understand what was important," but you wrote "what us important." It's so sad that her daughter doesn't even hear her soliloquoy, and yet it's metaphorical for the disconnect between them. I think it's interesting how the message here is similar to that in "For Best Results" - the old woman could even be Ellen. I think it's a good piece, but somehow it just doesn't have the same punch as some of your other work. |
| smellslikerainbows 2004-02-02 ch 1, | Ohh... The last three paragraphs of this are, the only word that comes to mind is beautiful. A great way to end it, even though I have to admit I want more. Somehow I don't think her daughter is going to understand, not for a very long time or even ever. My eyes have that tight feeling you get where you are almost going to cry, and I'm loving it. Words are very powerful things when used correctly, it appears. |
| Rose of Sharon 2003-12-15 ch 1, | This is great -- I love the palpable sense of sorrow in the old woman. |
| An Inside Joke 2003-12-15 ch 1, | Good message. I love the summing it all up in the word "live," but it's sad that the daughter didn't hear the whole speech. Great story. |
| meguin 2003-12-15 ch 1, | Really moving, I love it. Keep writing, hun! |