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| Always Writing 2004-04-01 ch 2,   | Very, very good. I love it, in both forms actually. To make me choose, I'd probably go for the rewritten version...don't ask why, for I don't have an answer. Both have great flow and emotion. Great piece(s). -Carrie Oh, and the spelling thing? No worries, using a computer leads to typing errors (as I've found out). And thanks for the review :) |
| Kell Hound 2003-12-28 ch 2, | i like the second one better even though they are both very good. the second one is a bit more interging. Kelsick PS thank for reveiwing legacy. more to come soon. |
| Keeper of the Forest 2003-12-27 ch 2, | I like the song both ways. But then again I'm wierd and can tell no difference between the two. Meh its still good. Good luck deciding which one to use. They both are very good. I know you hate it but its about your grammer. No it isn't just wqanted to say that. There is nothing wrong in this version of the song that my sleep fogged brain could see. |
| Keeper of the Forest 2003-12-16 ch 1, | Sorry but this one will be a one liner. Very good. If it wasn't for my control I would be bawling my eyes out. lol. not really but that's the way I felt as I read it. Hm... maybe this won't be a one liner. |
| EchoesOfReason 2003-12-16 ch 1, | This is a really good song. It's actually very deep in the words, they all have a deeper meaning to them than something on the surface. Now if you don't mind I'm going to give you some advice; most songs rhyme, it's the way the writers get them to flow together. Your song rhymes only at certain parts but it seems a little choppy inbetween. I think if you were to just use something like a rhyming dictionary or change certain words around you could get it to flow together perfectly. It's like a puzzle and for the puzzle to be complete and look good/complete, all the pieces have to fit together perfectly. Now in this case they can only fit together to a certain extent but your words have to keep to the tempo you are creating there. I'm sorry, I know I'm being critical but this song has the potential to be REALLY good, and I mean REALLY because the words go so deep, it goes into the human mind, it can go as deep as that and one wouldn't want to waste something that could do so well. Like I said before it's a puzzle. So I leave you with these words of advice and I go on to read your next work of art. Love always, A-Light-From-Your-Darnkess |
| Taylor Marin 2003-12-16 ch 1, | Very nice!! I can definitely hear a sort of melody to it, and it flows wonderfully. I can completely identify with the sentiment. ~Taylor |