very funny! _

Interesting. Techno Baron is funny though. _ I like it alot. However, you have some errors like typos here and there in the chapter. I'm sure it's okay though. It's nothing you can't fix. Oh, yeah, I have a little question. . .How did Grimes know that his girlfriend got kidnapped? You didn't mention who told him or anything. Well, I really hope you would continue this soon. This is getting really interesing so far! Please come and read some of my stories if you want. Thanks!

a lot of dialogue. but what can i say from a scripted story form? it was very enjoying reading this. continue!