I love that line - "Lord, how can I bear fruit unto Thee if no one sees me?" That is the question of the ages, isn't it? And about that many people have seen me. I applaud you.

Love the referance to LOTR. Maybe it's just me; I'm such a fanatic. The style is different, but nice. You make it work. But I have a question: If you were so invisible to everyone, did you every do anything about it? did you ever try to get someone to notice you? I just wonder. But remember, (I'm sure you know) that God is always there.

This poem is awesome! Very sincere and heartfelt, yet well-reflected and mature. I’ve often felt the way you describe, and still feel like that sometimes, and you give it such a powerful expression, I can identify so well.
I love the comparison to the Ringbearer. ;-) So you are a LotR fan as well? (Might have guessed from your pen-name …) If so, please do have a look at my LotR fanfiction on fanfiction.net (The link is on my profile page. I’ve also added some new poems.) If you like Tolkien, if you like Lewis, if you enjoyed “The Unicorn”, you’ll love it. (And Jesus is in it as well ;-) )
I feel like I’m
An empty shimmer
Like heat waves in the sun
I want to be
Solidified
But I’m noticed not by one
These lines are so powerful, the imagery is fantastic.
And the alternation between the short lines and the prose-like longer lines is great. As I said in my review on “Te Exspecto”, you are very original and inventive.
There’s a typo in the second last line (“the” twice), but that doesn’t matter. Again, I cannot express how much I like this poem.

A well written piece don't worry about the form it works when yuo read it. This is no competition for how good the poem appears before read... I like it, it really expresses that lonely and left out feeling

Definitely a little depressing. But for what it was, it was very nice.