very good, I can't wait for more, sry this is late

Not bad! More truth to this one then mine I'm afraid, and a little bit more true how it would happen, though not so sure if it did...
Later,
~Ffuffy~

Cool Sar, I can't wait for the next chapter, and you have all summer to write it! Yay!
~K~

"Call me anything, except short." LMAO Love it! Absolutely perfect!

Muy Bien.
Your story is so sad:(, but despite that fact, I still like it:).

Maybe I'll write my own story too. It so neat to read two different points of view of the same story.
Sucre Hija

Now I'mm read your stories, I have time too. So far I like it, and I can't wait until I come in the story.

I like this so far, although obviously you only have two chapters up so far. You seem to be a pretty good writer - although you might want to read this over for a few grammar errors etc. which I'm sure I don't need to point out - and your dialogue is excellent. You also manage to get plenty of background to the story in without any overt infodumping or slowing the story down particularly. IMHO more description would be nice, but that's just my opinion.

spiffy. there were a few things left unexplained, but all good things come in time. yup, im a moron. happy birthday on the 13!
~K~

And it is being continued. Sure, you write a decent one chappie thingmabob and then decided to continue. Yep, I see. It is a nice continuation though. Naturally, Kate fits into it. I am hoping for a few explanations about the kitty and the dragon, if possible. They confused me a bit.

Ok few things will change to be comical, but other then that, I'm following you're lead, bummer for you is that I most likly will be able to get more reviews, it would be a nice contest wouldn't it?
Later,
~FFuffy~

Aw, cute, well, don't mind if I change it a little. Mind you Miniki is hyperactive, cute and sweet, my exact opposite. Doesn't yell very often, but then again, when it comes to Vie...
Later Dude!
~FFuffy~

The best part about reading this story is that I don't have to read it! considering I already did when you printed it out for me. So what do you think of my Idea? Should Loki and I write our versions, what do you think?
Later,
~FFuffy(laugh at her schoolmates who were made to go to school today)~

the story was descritive and creative, it came from an origonal mind and a talented hand... i know almost nothing about writing, sorry, so for me to critique it would probably not be too cool.