A complex and meaningful piece. Very well-written, with thought-provoking imagery. Keep writing :)
*cosmo-queen*

This was awesome... the rhyming scheme was great. The imagery was also really good... Keep it up!
~Lidless Eye

yes indeed, this is one of your more complex pieces, but it's very enjoyable nonetheless. one of the things i like most about it is the fast-paced rhythm and loose rhyme ~ it reads just like a whole bunch of thought processess compounding on each other. my favorite stanza was the second one:

exhibition, inhibition
lose your soul in deep perversion
to catch a thief, to catch a man
come and find me, if you can

it reads *perfectly* and i think the message comes out clearest in that segment.

really good piece, i like it a lot. and welcome back. :)

I'm really sorry I didn't read this sooner; it is excellent. My grandfather was ALWAYS the man you described. He'd purposely get smashed so he could be the last to leave. Strange man, my grandfather. Great job as always, and have a very Merry Christmas.

...that's really good...it makes a startling amount of sense to me...really good, insanely eloquent, vividly descriptive...nice