If you continue this, you could get a pretty good song style poem out of it. And it is scary getting older, changing slowly into someone you don't know.

Wow, this is really well done, and you express yourself so well! You don't need to be forced, you just do it naturally! I enjoyed this work, and hope to see more! Keep up the great work!
(P.S., come review some of my stuff! I'm sure you'll enjoy it too!)

once again, great job! keep it up! :) luv ya gurl!! **me**

hey gurlie, omg this is so awesome, you gotta like, put these in a book or something n publish it!
*lyz

Haha, awesome! Your poems are so random but have a real depth to them. Its amazing! :D

*Hugs 'Elizabeth' lol* I hope that helps your scaredness...Jack can help too...HEY JACK! *Jack runs over* Jack: What? Talon: Go hug Elizabeth, she's scared. Jack: Why's she scared? Talon: Read her poem, yeh scallywag. *Jack reads poem. Jack hugs Elizabeth* Jack: Hope that helps, luv. Rum would help more, though. *HOlds up a bottle* Want some?
Lol, that was so fun...
*Talon