oh that was brilliant!!

i like it!

hey i find your user name FUNNY

then again i laugh when people die...

love...entrancing isn't it. Do people get into that mess so they can hurt? Perhaps. I liked the poem.

wow.I can appreciate the story behind this poem.I love it.Keep writing!

WOW O WOW O WOW O WOW!
please take a look at some of mine!

That was really good. And it rhymed too, even better. I can't rhyme for **, so good job.

it's funny how blood is such a strong substance for writers. I love it...and sometimes rely on it to make a good story.
however...I think the use of blood in this piece is a bit abused. when people think of the subject they automatically think "deep, dark, and mostly good". Don't try to use that to manipulate your readers. The dripping of blood really didn't hold a whole lot of relevance for me...but that's just my opinion. other than all that, it's not bad at all.

This reminds me of a girlfriend I had who I discovered was cutting herself (she had a argumentive relationship with her mother). I didn't know what to do for her except accept that she was emotionally fragile and to help her when I could. As far as I know, she doesn't do it anymore, but still no one deserves pain, from others or from themselves.
I guess this seems to deviate from the classic sense of a review, but it does show that good writing makes you think, sometimes about things you'd rather forget. Basically a good poem that wants to stick to four beats. It almost looks as if the thought started out as prose (maybe a germ for a short story?) but it was discovered that some lines could easily rhyme, so the story was abandoned for poem form. My theory is hard to prove (and may be incorrect), but I'm talking now about the writer's subconscious awareness of rhythm and how some entire sentences tend to flow off the tongue even when spoken without any attempt to rhyme at all.
Just don't be so sad!

it conveys such sadness but at the same time self worthlessness...(i think thats a word...)but your poem is written with emotion and it shows...i like it
~*Arries Kurai*~

I've seen better...by monkies

The emotions are beautifully strewn across the words, making it easy to read and easy for the reader to understand the point. I like this. The title is very poetic as well. Good job.

It almost sounds like someone being attacked. Then they accept it as what they deserve. "take a little bit of whats mine." Doesn't seem like a willing death. Very good work.

Yeah, that as sad, but also very moving.
I like your work, keep writing!

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