Intriguing...are you going to continue? I'd like to read more!

Good, but sort of fast at the end. Maybe some more interaction between Flame and the woman? Or a personality to the band teacher, instead of kicking a student out of his class for getting her violin a second late? I wasn't sure about that part. Otherwise, as I said-good job!
~Kiara

Hehe. Sounds cool. Everything happens so fast. What a strange mom! ^^

Ah...interesting. I'd like to see where this goes. Are the Roman numerals separations for chapters or just for sections?

man i have trouble readin.. good story or outline or ... yea.

wow, i really like it! you always describe every action so thoroughly, i love it. and i love the old library... sounds like something i would want to do n__n
i caught a few mistakes, just some spelling. might want to proofread it closer. i saw "disfortune" where it should be "misfortune" and when the orchestra teacher is yelling, you mentioned insults, but it was unclear where those insults where coming from (altho i assume it was the teacher)
it was great. i just wish you would CONTINUE to update your stories instead of leaving them in the middle to start a new story. i get so involved, then you just stop updating them. it makes me sad =(