A little short, but good. And i think the "death ears" in the first sentence should be "deaf ears", but other than that, pretty good!

Dude! This is really good. Do more dark stuff, you are good at it.

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I like this story Autty. Its sad. Poor Rachel and her brother and her lover.
Write more short stories for me to read! ^_^ Buh Bye