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Maledict 2004-02-21 ch 1,	abuseI really, really like this. It's short, sweet, and compelling. Tear-bringing, but not a point where you cry. I'm left thinking it's in some mid-1900's setting, almost, just ... for some reason I can't explain, even though I know it's not. They're losing something, but still holding onto the good things in life. Cookies. Aw. I love your writing.
The Great Muses 2004-01-24 ch 1,	abuseOMG, this is really sweet ashe! I like a lot ... it seems it needs a sequel, but then again, it's nice just as a short story. Yay! I just realised that you wrote a short story! Go you, woo hoo!!. Ahem.
Jhanvi 2003-12-29 ch 1, anon.	abusePwetty! What a sweet little short story. I felt like Christmas went away too soon, so I'm glad I found this. lol Thanks! P.S. It snowed here last night! ^-^ It NEVER snows! happyme I made a snowlady and gave her chocolate disc eyes and a rosepetal for lips (because my rosebushes somehow lasted this long and I took one of the blossoms off) Yeah..I just have to tell everyone..
Bobbi Jane 2003-12-23 ch 1,	abuseI liked it but it was lacking detail. I don't really get what it is all about. Is that it? Is that really a story? It is sweet but it needs more. What is your characters smelling, hearing, tasting ect.? Make a longer story out of that peice and then it will be great.
Believe 2003-12-23 ch 1,	abuseWell I liked it... Short, sweet and to the point. A little sad but I'm in an angsty mood so it's all good! Well done.
the third eye 2003-12-23 ch 1,	abuseyour story has spirit, but it doesn't have a point. Which is all very well and good, but then you need to develop it with details. Why was the little girl lisping? How did Suzie get scarlet fever? What sort of cancer did the dad have? Was the apartment in a nice neighborhood? Were the Christmas carolers from the local church, or were they just a motley crew spreading holiday cheer? It could be good, you just need to tell it.

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