It's really good. The bitter-sweet ending saves it from being trite.

oh wow that was beautiful. it was an amazing story though i wish it had a happier ending but im satisfied. i loved it!

that was the most awe inspiring thing I've ever read. Filled with such passion and poetry, I'm not sure what to say to describe the feelings it created. Amazing, is all I can really say. I'm glad I read that.

nice little piece here, really nice work, with all the intricate detail nad surreal view and the sort of 'dream' backdrop...nice job!

Wow. This is really beautiful, incredible. The imagery is wonderful, and I can almost taste and feel the things you describe. This is wonderful.

I LOVE IT! it's superb!

Excellent

Great 1st chapter, I take it there are going to be more chapters or is this a short story thing?

WOW! This was awesome! WOW! lol I have nothing else to say besides that. AWESOME! Good job with it ^_^

Wow. I love it. Great work, I think I'll go read Brother Sun, Sister Moon.
Keep it up, won't you?
-Anywien

Wow...OMG! I love this! It's so well written, and I can see the characters so perfectly. *squeals* Write more, please!

Whoa! this story's awsome! please tell me it's going to continue! You have an awsome, deep way of writing. awsome piece! ^_^

Wow, that was so well written!

That's a great story, it explains emotions clearly.

O! I like! Good job! Very good. *hands author a shiny gold medal* here is your reward!