This is the first story I've actually read on fictionpress, and I have to say, I'm glad. This story really touched me A LOT, since I enjoy music too and can relate in that way. Also, it is sad in a way, but I think there's a happy ending. It didn't take me long to read either, and I'm surprised at how such a short story can produce such a profound effect. (Yes, enough of my rambling...) Good job!

That was beautiful Blue. I don't think I could write a piece like that in a million years. And I'm not just saying that lightly. Every WORD was perfect

Very colorful and quite unique. Sounds a bit like the Swede doesn't translate exactly... But it does fit nicely. The only way to improve it would be to describe things a bit more fully, with mid-class words so as to honor the spirit of the story (this en't no bulgin cranium documentary mate). You could also touch up the grammar a bit:) Very nice! Brought on a bit of fine mist...

it was really good although kindof depressing, but i still liked it and all.

BMW

That was a extremely sad story. I almost cried but my parents were in the room and it would have been imbarasing. A vary good short story but I like Shadow Claw better.

sad, very sad. Too bad she had to go and kill herself. But she did what she wanted to do,a t least. And I liked the lyrics, they went well with the story. ^_^ Nice job.
--Belle

That was a lovely story! It conveyed emotion quite well. I'm also very fond of Legend of Mana, so I could relate to the song, even though I've only ever heard the swedish version.

Hola, yes, I did see the review button, and yes, I did click on it. Now, here's my say. Your story encompasses some pretty deep themes, namely misery, suicide (correct me if I'm wrong), and finally, liberation. It's good, because I can't write serious fics (I did, for my SPM, and I hope that the examiner wouldn't think that I'm some gothic cultster or anything):-)
Nice writing...and the songs are pretty relevant as well. I'm not going to comment on your grammer, because I don't know my prefixes from my imperatives, or my gerunds from my conjunctions. Finally, tell your sister I said hi, alright? And don't freak out. I'm 17, chinese, Malaysia (therefore, I'm not some lunatic stalker =) )

Hey, sis! Nice story! Touching yet happy, glad she's at peace!
~Lady Nessa

Wow! I happened to know this song, Blue Dragon! And it's my one of my favorites too! It was great listening to the music while reading your original songfic. Yeah, I like to sing Swedish.
But what's really weird is that the songstress doesn't even have a name. And yet, it's still so sad. . . .
*nods*
Until then,
Spell ya later!

Hey, thanks for reviewing my work. Really heartened to know that you like Asetina's Hope. I'm trying to find time to revamp it (though it's a bit hard). Haven't had much time to do fic pieces and review other authors' work.
Anyway, for the review...
I like this short piece. It has a sad soft sorrowful feel to it. And the length is just nice too. Any longer and i think it would have been a spoilt piece.

I finally got the chance to read this and I have to say it was really great but very sad also. However, it was nice to know she was finally at peace. Keep up the great job. :-)

Very Good Blue Dragonsy! This is very good, great job. ^-^ Keep up the great work!
Huggles
Moonlit Evanescence aka Astura Firea (Daughter of Fire)
ps, i've updates 'a secret that cannot be with held' and now have a side fic called 'a love forged' plz take a lok at it and tell me wot u think, as no one seems to like it :(

Wow, very sad ... and touching. To think that she had such a sad life and then was set free is pretty comforting, though it was still sad at the end with her death. Am I making sense? Ah well, I think you know what I mean - hopefully - anyway, I like it. The word "song" seemed to show up a bit too much for my liking, but I guess you didn't really have a choice, after all how many words are there for "song"? Overall good job, hope you get more reviews. :)