First off, on the stupid note of this review, that is also the name of a Red Hot Chilli Peppers song.
On the serious side, the imagrey that sets in ones mind is breathtaking.
You're writing captured the escence of what you were feeling, methinks.
It flows beutifully, and I love it.
In Woffles terms: Shibby!

I think it could use some commas, but other than that, it was really good. It kinda grabbed you from the beginning, giving a good mental picture.
~Lil Lalita

Kind of scary...but the imagery was really amazing. Good job