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Ancamna 2004-03-13 . chapter 4
Oh no!! Another cliffhanger!! Oh, well *pout* I guess I'll have to live with it. Anyway, I love the twist you've put it the story.
Question about the girl: are her eyes green? or are they white b/c she's blind? I'm a little confused, I don't really get what you mean by vacant. Is it just that she's staring off into space? Also, when Vakra's dreaming, it seems like she's remembering her car crash. But then it seems like she's the little green girl. Who is she? hm...I guess I'll find out later in the story. *_*
And where does Eky live that she'll be there about noon tommorrow? Far away?
And oh yes, I don't really mind if this isn't a fairy tale happy ending - b/c it's so good anyway (though I do prefer happy endings ^_^). But your Story Without a Name ended happily. ^_~ Though you do say that most of your stories don't so maybe it was just unique.
Anyway, for my Crown Keeper story, I just stated a lot of the info at the beginning so readers would know what I'm talking about, otherwise it might get confusing. I'm going to do it less often as the story progresses. But I think you're Story W/o a Name is fine how it is - I don't mind stated facts, sometimes it makes things less confusing. And when I get around to updating I'm going to combine the first two chapters of Dancing in the Moonlight.
Just figured I'd answer some of the stuff you said before. Keep writing! ^_^
Earthsong12 2004-03-10 . chapter 4
Boo. You didn't use my ideas. Oh well, it's much more interesting your way anyway. I like it. Very confusing, but not in a bad way. Just in that "the reader doesn't know what's going on yet" way. I love doing that. Make them think one thing, then throw in all these twists...heheehe!
Sorry, I get carried away. Keep writing! Can't wait for the next chapter!
Earthsong12 2004-03-04 . chapter 2
Me again-sorry, I meant contest, not concert. I was probably half asleep at the time. bye bye!
Earthsong12 2004-03-03 . chapter 1
Hi, me again. I just got your reviews now cause my review alert's messed up (yay!! reviews!! Thank you!! ^-^) and I wanted to say that the thing I noticed, about Spiral Notebook-Vaskra similarity? I don't think you should change it. I think it's cooler if you leave it and see how many people notice it. Kinda fun! Actaully, i got the idea cause you said *you win the prize!* It could be a sort of concert...
Wow I've talked a whole lot about nothing. Bye now!
Ancamna 2004-03-03 . chapter 3
Oh no! A cliffhanger! Okay, you have a few typos but they're not that important; just read your story out loud and you'll find them - it might also help with giving you ideas. Anyway, for some of my own ideas. I think Vaskra was a nickname (like Earthsong12 said), but I don't think Ekenemolisa (can I call her Lisa? - it's shorter and easier to spell) thinks Eric is a stalker. With a name like that (by the way, I love your cool names) she has to has some kind of magical sense. Or she has had an encounter with Vaskra. Possibly she knows that Erik loved Aerin. By the pause in the end of the phone I would assume that something has happened to make her wary of talking about Vaskra; perhaps she knows that Aerin has died (a very likely possibility) or she has had an encounter with her. Or she has ...hm... let's say she has magic of a kind, maybe she's Wiccan ... and she tried to contact Aerin but found nothing, or found Vaskra... Like it? Oh, let's say that she has magic and has found out about Vaskra...somehow...(you figure it out)and she comes over to Eric's house and they talk to Vaskra...or try something with her (magic something)...and Vaskra regains her memory. Then...something happens...and Vaskra/Aerin gets married to Eric. And Lisa's a bridesmaid!! (You might or not want to put Aerion/Vaskra back into human form first.) Like my ideas? I hope they help! I hate Mr. Writer's block! XD ^_^
Ancamna 2004-03-03 . chapter 1
Love it! Will finish later! Must go!
Earthsong12 2004-02-29 . chapter 3
This is interesting. You have a way with words. Good description, flows nicely-I'm very impressed.
One confusing thing: Why did Ekenemolisa call Aerin Vaskra? Was it a nickname?
Hmm, story ideas. Well, an obvious one is that Ekenemolisa doesn't want to give him info and he has to hunt her down. I mean, if someone emailed you and said "hi, give me info on this girl", would you really do it? I bet she thinks he's a stalker. OOh-maybe he could get arrested! ^-^ These are just random ideas, you don't have to use any of them.
Good luck getting rid of Mr. Writers Block. Write more please!
Pont 2004-01-12 . chapter 2
hwe! aerin's not bad is she? *puppy eyes*
wow, great start... a little confusing as to whether the 'voice' was a good thing or a bad thing... but otherwise quite good! i love the twist.
not really anything to comment as of yet- i can tell you're just getting warmed up.
oh yeah, about glisten in shadow, it's something i did a while ago and just got around to posting. it's not one of my best works. in fact, my best friend's been telling me eclipse is better and that i've gotten much better, therefore it sucks. :P i love my rellerina. ^-^ lol!
im planning on rewriting it in some of my very limited free time though, ill alert you.
meanwhile, keep going, I'm keeping tabs on this one!
anywho, ja ne!
Kekadu the Goddess of Chaos 2004-01-01 . chapter 1
Oh! I like it. Very interesting...compelling. Let me know when you write more. I'd like to read it!
Keep on writing!
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