I thought this was very well thought and written. It draws you in and carries you 'til the end. Keep up the good work...

You use so much emotion when you write, Jon, you put a "stamp" on it,and I know it's yours without your name above it.

Yet another great piece from you.

Arg, finally. Stupid piece of...
Ah, yes, your story. *in awe* Seriously... This is GOOD. Oh man. You have some real talent here...I loved it.
I wish I could give you some of my favourite lines, but then I'd be copying and pasting the whole story! Seriously, this was amazing, and I'm going to go read every single other story, and write nonsensical reviews that aren't any help for them too. Aren't you lucky...
- Mel