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Reviews For: Dead Heart

Sapphire Spectrum 2006-02-14 ch 1,	That was beautiful. truly beautiful. The way you captured the emotion, and left it without an ending - but with an ending, a continuation of sorrow... brilliant. Brilliant.
escape into reality 2004-09-22 ch 1,	oh my god. ...oh my god. i am jealous of your ability to describe the indescribable in such a beautiful way. i especially liked the first paragraph, the part about the empty picture frames, the phrase "unedwarding himself," and the way he relives random memories brought up by equally random objects. whoaa.
breakdown in the waiting ro... 2004-06-18 ch 1,	I’ve read so many novels and stories and poems that at times I confuse them, forget them, mess up details about them. There’s a short list of things I’ve read that have stuck in my mind in their entirety, become a part of me. This is one of them. This is a perfect, mature picture of grief. It hurt me when I read it, made me cry, because I identify with it and even if I didn’t I’d know anyway that it’s genuine. I said it already, but this is perfect- it leaves an imprint. I mean, I was in the grocery store a few days after I first read this, and passing a display of organic cereal brought back the line: “You can eat selected parts of dead animals when I die.” I don’t have anything to say criticism-wise. . .it’s just too perfect. And that’s all that I can say. -Jessica
DWill 2004-02-12 ch 1,	i imagined myself in his shoes and asked myself how i would have felt if my lover passed away. I think you got it all down good. wonderful. i wish i had the time and commitment like you. ~Dwill~
aleppine 2004-01-11 ch 1,	Bone to pick. Bone to pick. [BONE PICKERY] ! Do not jest about 'dormant imaginations' around me, young lady. narrow-eyed glare You have been warned. All this self-dissery, especially coming from you. growls [/BONE PICKERY] Hello! I read the opening paragraph and it was so vivid, I really thought he was with someone. That was almost a shock, and I don't know why. It promises of yumminess to come. I'm not complaining. sniggers 'He half-dreams in reality.' 0_0 '...as his eyes 'receive' sunlight...' The 'receive' ... oh, the 'receive' ... and concept of a 'bruised heartbeat' ... devours words greedily This man's familiarity with one type of life that included another is so well described. The every day routines, the habits, the sensations like those in the first paragraph. Familiarity isn't the right word. The way you describe it, it feels like to live any differently to how he had lived with that missing person is to move out of your mind. 'alloy'. Great word there, struck me. The feeling of loss was wonderfully portrayed, without being named. Until I got to the photos and the empty picture frames. Then it was just amazingly portrayed. Oh ... I'd wondered whether the person was dead ... they felt dead, rather than just absent, because the character shows no real feeling of hurt. More despair, disorientation, that glazed overwhelming loss of the permenantly robbed. The sections you've divided this into are perfect. Near-insanity, start or recovery, but more so the titles. 'and you don't even feel a thing' at the top there (and i love the way you put them in bold, with the punctuation additions) drives home the numb emptiness, the shock and the dead heart theme. the 'i'm still hurting' comes to alleviate the feeling that, as the numbness begins to recede a little, it makes room for a different kind of pain. 'help me to breath' was a perfect finale. WELL. wow. wow. that was my little analysis, but there were dozens of things i lingered over but gave up on mentioning for fear of essay. i think i will go away, drink tea [sudden inspiration :D] and come back reread it. yes. the feelings that evoked need to be comforted. else ... wow. scuttles
teagannox 2004-01-02 ch 1,	oh my god. i don't know why anyone hasn't read this one yet. it made me cry. it just made me think about how hard it would be to lose a lover like that. even if i'm the only one to review this, you better be damn proud, because this is the best story i have ever read
zelle 2004-01-02 ch 1,	I am lost, dazed, in awe. Please, don't stop. Aside from little typos and grammar errors (which can be overlooked in the face of this...well, THIS.) It's one of the most delicious things I've been able to get my teeth into in a while. I'm so glad I found you.

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