Woah. I love this. IloveitIloveitIloveit. Wonderful imagery, and great topic. Not cliche. Keep up the good work!

Excellent poem. Very well-written and deep, with powerful images throughout. The format of the poem is also very effective. I especially liked how the poem ends. Keep writing :)
*cosmo-queen*

I was speechless for a while after reading this...
Amazing. The imagery was Astonishing; it gets more vivid the more you read. And the more I read, the closer I leaned it to the screen. At last I was reading too fast that I kept mixing up the words. This is incredible! Brilliant work, I loved that one line 'As the dream digs deep into my skin', and the way that you separated the words and italicized them was very effective. I actually got chills from reading this... and I've only gotten the chills from reading a poem once before this. Just... wow.

So deep, nasty, and gorgeous it gave me chills. *im back*, Yes. Sorry to have ignored your author alerts for so long, I'm so glad to see your writing again. This is truly amazing. I used to get realy bad nightmares when I was little, and this reminded me of some of them. I got a mental image of a Gollum-like character, bound to his past and tortured by the memories. Excellent job, keep writing.
ELise

awesome poem! dark, sent chills down my spine, the imagery you use in this piece is vivid and simply breathtaking. amazing writing. great job!

Oh wow. Awesome! I love the last line. Wow. I can't stop saying that. But it was great. Nice and dark but with certain shafts of light shining through. Definitly amazing though. Keep up the great work!

Wow. You made this into a very powerful piece. The form worked extremely well.
~Heart of the Sword