well written..and I am a wiccian an I apreciate a story that makes us sound cool!

Wow!
This looks really good so far!
You have a good use of vocabulary, too! It's nice to have a good variety of words.
I don't really have anything bad to say, everything looks good I just hope you update soon! Keep going, definately!!
If you can, could you please r&r my new story, When Snow Falls in Vermont? Thanks!