Ouch. Now that's pain. I like it.

The style is diffrent, the poem is good, but I like your old style better. Its still good though :D

its really very nice the rhyming isn't forced...its very flowing. I like it very much. Great Job!
Kar

aw, how lovely. i always have a problem w/ that particular rhyme scheme, i either run out of words or insist on using unrhymable (word?) words _ but u did a wonderful job of it _
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