Thats good! You did REALLY well on getting into the emotions, and everything. I've only had a small part in a small 6th grade play, myself, but... I've had friedns in Drama, and they feel just like that.
Good story, and I hope I DO see more of it.

This is good. Really good. Only thing I would pick out is she doesn't seem as nervous and insecure as you say in your summary. Is there a way you could do that? Also, she has a huge crush on this Shane guy, try adding some long, drippy stuff about this guy! JMO.
agid

It is an okay peice. The writing is a bit choppy and I must say your topic is not original.In fact i have seen it atleast 20 times on cartoons. You played into the classic stereotype perfectly..why not try a new view..maybe not from the girl's perspective..or stereotypeless?

oh my god, thank you for pointing out that error -smacks herself!- I knew that I had something incorrect, but I coiuldn't remember. Arg, I hope it's completely fixed now.
Thank you again ^.^;

And here I was think ing it was "...where ever art thou..."

In the last line, it's wherefore, not where. Big difference. That, however, is the only qualm I have with an otherwise gorgeous piece. n_n