Wow! Very nice, very nice indeed! I like it! Write more soon.
~DB

Great start! You've grabbed my attention, and quickly too. Keep posting.
CR

Nice. Very nice. Well done. Very good detail and the feelings you put into it... i can feel them myself. Very well done.

I am not reviewing my own work, I'm just letting everyone know that this is my first vampire work, and I will try to be as accurate as possible. Any critism is appreciated, good or bad. Thank you.