I really enjoyed this one. Geez, my hands are so cold I can barely type. I thought it sounded a bit forced, the reader really has to work to get it to flow past their ears and into their brains, or hearts, depending. I liked your comparison to diamonds... overall very nicely done.
Raye... or Tau... whichever you prefer

Love it.
You are a wise 14 year old. :)

It's nice. And very pretty. :)
Very good!
Tokiko
please check out some of my stuff too, okay? thanks..