Good job bud! I like this one, it isn't easy to capture the moment after it happens. This is a great poem, keep it up.
ps: GET ON MSN SOMETIME!
-Ricer

This was really neat, too. The writing style you implement in this really does make you think. Great work.
~Lidless Eye

hm, very interesting. seems slightly deviant from your usual style ~ i like it. it was interesting how it seemed to wander from memory to memory - almost like a dream, or something. "skinny little neck" was a great line, in context. so was "you beribboned duck." good work. :)

I remember the days of our poetry page, my goodness you have grown as a writer...
"let that big belittled dictater
have some more 'vodika'
and settle right down" is my favourite, not quite sure why.
You inspire me.