I get carried in the wings of my obsessions, savoring them all. Heartfelt.

the progression and flow of the poem is excellent. Nice word choice too, the emotions are depicted so clearly.

this is very good, i like it very much
my fav stanza is, "I took my very own advice, To drift off into paradise."
i love this whole poem it is great

It flows so wonderfully. It just rolls of the tongue. You get your point across beautfully. I shall have to read more of your writing.

Very good, deep poem. Great Job.

I really like how this poem sounds...I wish it was longer though ;)

hi, sorry I havent been around to review you awesome writing (evil school work)this is excellent, I love the emotion and feeling you put into it! keep writing,
GoldMetalGymnast

hmm.. Nice job with rhyming and still keeping the meaning. I know lots of people have trouble with that. I've felt like this before, so don't worry, you're not alone:)

Wow man, DEEP! takes me millions of years before i write somethn' like that, good work!
Never the same

Wow. The emotion here is so intense.

rhyming is always hard to do ... but it makes the poetry flow better so good on you to do it. and also the emotion behind this poem is intense at the core. i felt it, i truly did. great job with this. plz check out some of my stuff ... and write more poetry!
k8