Wow, it's almost Ironic. Very cool.

Not bad. A couple spelling mistakes, such as "tool" rather than took" and "haveing" rather than "having" overall, not bad writing. Quite morbid. I once wrote a poem similar to it ...
Remy/The Blind Guardian

Good piece. I liked the contrasts in the poem. Just one spelling error- 'haveing' should be 'having'. Keep writing :)
*cosmo-queen*

Thoughtful, with a message that isn't blatantly expressed. Some typos here and there, but overall quite good. Thanks for reviewing The Fantasy Chrons, by the way.
P.S. I tried uploading the original portion of your poem to see if FP.com would let me, and it works fine with Notepad. Try Notepad if you just want the first bit.

This is a really good poem. I love the ending. Oh, and you spelled "knowledge" wrong. It's a "w", not an "e". But whatever. You know, what really surprised me was how much your writing differs from your... conversational voice? Yeah, that's good. It's a really striking difference. But that's how most people are, I guess. If I wrote how I talked, my writing would su-u-uck! (See, there you go, good example right there) Anyway, this is a really good poem, and I can see how you won.

Um, it was good kinda weird and confusing but good.